Clear, sharp writing?

I’ve been asked just what is clear, engaging, sharp writing.

So instead of going through a  dissertation that explains, defines, theorises (and probably bores), I’m simply going to give you a (very) few examples from documents I’ve edited or read.

Research has been done that shows…                   Research shows…

Training of personnel must be done…                    Personnel must be trained…

There are numerous books that deal with…          Numerous books deal with…

There are two consequent actions that occur when…         Two things will happen when…

Companies and the products they produce…                Companies and their products…

When they first started their business…                               When they started their business…

Many clients are under the assumption that…         Many clients assume that…

We will confirm the details with regard to agenda.           We will confirm the agenda details.

And to finish off with a chuckle (those misplaced or dangling phrases!)

There was a discussion yesterday on the worrying of sheep by dogs in the Minister’s room.

I have discussed the question of stocking the proposed poultry plant with my colleagues.

Born two weeks ago, zookeepers feared Shuffles would not survive after such a traumatic delivery.

Not sure why I made those changes?

Leave a question in the Comments or email me if you want the inside information

or any other help with your non-fiction writing.

Do you have examples of  less-than-sharp writing to share?

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